The Silent Bon Dance Festival

Aug 17, 2015 14:12
In summers in Japan, we often join a bon dance festival that was originally a Buddhist event.

In the bon dance festival, we play music, hit drums, and dance.

However, recently in Japan, people who feel annoyed to the sound of the festival has increased.

Therefore, some bon dance festivals became silent ones.

They wear an earphone, and just dance.

From afar, this may seem like zombie dance.
No. 1　デクラン's correction
  • In summers in Japan, we often join a bon dance festival that was originally a Buddhist event.
  • During summers in Japan, we often join a bon dance festival which was originally a Buddhist event.
  • In the bon dance festival, we play music, hit drums, and dance.
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
  • However, recently in Japan, people who feel annoyed to the sound of the festival has increased.
  • However, recently in Japan, people who feel annoyed about the sound of the festival have increased.
  • Therefore, some bon dance festivals became silent ones.
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
  • They wear an earphone, and just dance.
  • They wear an earphones, and just dance.
  • From afar, this may seem like zombie dance.
  • From afar, they may seem like dancing zombies.
Dancing zombies! 面白いですね！^_^
kanotown
Thank you very much for correcting my post! :D
Yeah, it's funny, but it's also eerie, haha.
No. 2　Echokame's correction
  • In summers in Japan, we often join a bon dance festival that was originally a Buddhist event.
  • During the summer in Japan, we often join a "Bon" dance festival which was originally a Buddhist event.
  • In the bon dance festival, we play music, hit drums, and dance.
  • In this dance festival, we play music, hit drums, and, of course, dance.
  • However, recently in Japan, people who feel annoyed to the sound of the festival has increased.
  • However, recently, the number of people who feel annoyed by the loudness of the festival has increased in Japan. Recently, however, the number of people who are annoyed by the loudness of this festival has increased in Japan.
    　The blue sentence is another way. :)
  • Therefore, some bon dance festivals became silent ones.
  • Therefore, some "Bon" dance festivals have become silent ones.
  • They wear an earphone, and just dance.
  • They wear headphones, and just dance.
Tee hee hee. 投稿を呼んだら、見てみたい！
kanotown
Thank you very much for correcting my post! :D
It might be so scary, haha.
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